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1194. Re: Let me write a poem.
お名前: スニフ
投稿日: 2014/12/14(06:48)
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"fauree1845"さんは[url:kb:1193]で書きました:
〉Snow makes the roads white
〉This winter is also going to be cold
〉Unkind words have hurt me but I'm OK
〉I've OK'd what will go with me
(snip)
〉I don't know the rules of poems at all.
〉If the contents in it are bad, please tell me.
I think the last word of the second line `cold' should rhyme
with the last word of the first line `white'.
It would be better to construct the second line to end with
a word such as `hide', `kite', `slide', etc..